I'm guessing this is what you meant by saving werewolves for future projects? ;) I only have one gripe (not even a complaint, really) - you have a strange habit of putting the MC into situations that he just... accepts. Not sure about you but if I were dragged into a dungeon and thrown in a cell, the first thing I'd do is look for a way to escape. Even after, thrown into a room, I'd at least make the attempt to escape. We're talking about a man literally dying to get to his family but now just... accepts being a prisoner with no attempt at escape (at least until dinner) - you have to admit, this is rather odd behaviour. In any case, curious to see how this plays out although I suspect I already know the answer. lol
Actually, I don't find anything wrong with your writing. It looks more like you're skipping over things to get to the heart of the story you want to tell. I can understand that. Maybe what might help is imagine you're the one in a given situation and how you would react to it... and what it might take for you to come to terms with it. That can be as much of an adventure than the heart of the story you're trying to get to. Who knows what might happen. ;) (But for the love of all that is holy, no dancing teapots! lol)
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The way the game constantly shifts between first person and second person POVs is very disorienting.
I... didn't..make it🥺💔
I know I wasn't supposed to say this,but your game is the only one that could cure me💔
Oh that's so sweet!!
well that's a shame... I hope you can try again and succeed this time round.
Thank you....❤️🩹
Is this already good to read? I mean if its short content i would just wait for another update.
It's rather short for now. Like a 15 min intro to the story.
Alright, thx for the response :)) appreciated
Hell yeahhhhhh This Is the best man
Thanks a lot bro!!
Yea been waiting for this 🤣
Hell yeah!
😉🖤🔥
Too early to say if I like this or not, can't wait for the next update <3
I love this game😍I hope you can make chapter 2! :)
Thank you!! Glad you enjoyed, and more of the story is in the making. ;3
really?! I'll be waiting!!! :'D
Umm..how to tip u?:'( I can't tip u with PayPal :'( cuz I don't know how to do the PayPal thingy...I hope this app has phone credit so I can tip u :(
I think on here you can only pay with PayPal and Payoneer from what I know. But I have only PayPal connected. Thanks anyways bro. ;)
Sure!but I feel sorry for you cuz I can't tip you...🤧
btw keep up the good work! I will forever and ever support you!! :>
I'm guessing this is what you meant by saving werewolves for future projects? ;) I only have one gripe (not even a complaint, really) - you have a strange habit of putting the MC into situations that he just... accepts. Not sure about you but if I were dragged into a dungeon and thrown in a cell, the first thing I'd do is look for a way to escape. Even after, thrown into a room, I'd at least make the attempt to escape. We're talking about a man literally dying to get to his family but now just... accepts being a prisoner with no attempt at escape (at least until dinner) - you have to admit, this is rather odd behaviour. In any case, curious to see how this plays out although I suspect I already know the answer. lol
Thanks for feedback. I'm very much a noob at writing so shit like this happens a lot. Thank you for pointing it out.
Actually, I don't find anything wrong with your writing. It looks more like you're skipping over things to get to the heart of the story you want to tell. I can understand that. Maybe what might help is imagine you're the one in a given situation and how you would react to it... and what it might take for you to come to terms with it. That can be as much of an adventure than the heart of the story you're trying to get to. Who knows what might happen. ;) (But for the love of all that is holy, no dancing teapots! lol)
Hahaha don't worry. There will be no dancing teapots lo
May I ask where you got these backgrounds from?
I drew them. :)
Really fun idea! 😁 The transition from being free to imprisoned felt a little unnatural, but I'm interested to see where xou take this 😋
Yes!!!!! Belle its my favorite story, sooo good. But please make him a furry forever and not turn him in a human like the movie.
Add a wolf husband and some horny-ness and it's perfect.
Well you're converted, in any case this new VN has style, especially with a human who meets a beastman good job :)
Thanks a lot! I've been trying some new stuff this time around and really like how it's going for now.
I see, I see, don't stop :)